Each line below is from a MFC finalist's story, and each contains at least one error. See if you can spot the problems. Answers after the jump!
1. "Don’t think I won’t sell him," She yelled. 2. It's lighter now, the sun has almost come up. 3. Raising my hands up and closing my eyes, I relish the droplets of sustenance that is falling on our skin. 4. “Alright, Grace. I think it’s time I showed you my garage.” 5. “I can’t take being lonely any longer,” I can hear my voice getting shrill, but I can’t stop. 6. [The driver glared with the kind of irritation] that says 'I'm not having a good day and you aren't helping'.
Doe, a deer, a female deer! Ray, a drop of falling thesis statements!
Hello, I am doing a history paper on the von Trapps. I was wondering if you would look at my working thesis and help me make it stronger. I don't know how much you can help me but I'm grateful if you can help at all.
Here is my thesis:
Maria came to the von Trapp family to tutor a sickly child, with them she found love, family, and music.