Common Grammar Errors
Just like Identifying Sentence Errors questions, Improving
Sentences questions cover the same grammar over and over. In fact,
there are five recurring errors on Improving Sentences questions.
We call them the Big Five.
The Big Five
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Passive voice
- Run-on
sentences
- Misplaced
modifiers
- Parallelism
- Wordiness
We cover all of the Big Five below in more detail. Learn
to spot all five and you’ll be well on your way to beating Identifying
Sentence Errors with ease.
1. Passive Voice
In sentences that use the active voice, the subject does
the action. For example, in the sentence My dog ate a bunch
of grass, you immediately know who ate a bunch of grass:
the dog. The passive voice, in contrast, identifies the performer
of the action late, or even never. For example, the sentence A
bunch of grass was eaten leaves the reader unsure of who
or what did the eating. Writers tend to avoid using the passive voice
because it creates weak, wordy sentences.
So, how do you know if you are dealing with a
case of “the passives”? Usually, you’ll spot these words: is, was, were, are (or
any other version of the verb to be) and the word by.
If you see these words, ask yourself, What’s the action and who’s
doing it? If the person (or entity) committing the action appears
only at the end of the sentence, or doesn’t appear at all, you’ve
got a passive voice whispering bland nothings in your ear.
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After
Timmy dropped his filthy socks in the hamper, the offensive
garment was washed by his long-suffering father. |
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the offensive garment was washed by his long-suffering
father |
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his long-suffering father washed the offensive garment |
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the washing of the offensive garment took place by his
long-suffering father |
| (D) |
long-suffering, the offensive garment was washed by his
father |
| (E) |
he left the offensive garment for his long-suffering father
who washed it |
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Here we see passive voice rearing its horrendous head.
There’s a was, a by, and the fact
that you don’t know until the last word of this sentence who washed
Timmy’s socks. The phrase was washed suggests that
someone or something did the cleaning—a parent, a washing machine,
a river in Egypt. The point is, you don’t know how the socks got
washed.
In order to fix the passive voice, the performer of the
action must get a place of prominence in the sentence and clear
up what they’re doing. In the example above, the correct answer
must make clear that Timmy’s father did the load of laundry. Both
answers B and E fix the passive voice
problem, but E is wordy and redundant, so B is
the right answer.
2. Run-On Sentences
A run-on sentence results when two complete sentences
get jammed together. Run-ons usually sound breathless, as if an
excited child is telling a story. Here’s an example of a run-on
sentence:
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I
walked into the pet store and asked the clerk if she had any talking
parrots, this made her roll her eyes. |
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The best way to test if a sentence is a run-on is to split
the sentence in two and see if both halves of the sentence could
function alone:
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I
walked into the pet store and asked the clerk if she had any talking
parrots. This made her roll her eyes. |
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Because each half of this sentence is complete on its
own, the two halves cannot be joined together with a comma.
Here are three ways to fix run-on sentences in Improving
Sentences questions:
- Method 1: Use a semicolon.
- Method 2: Add a conjunction.
- Method 3: Make the clauses relate clearly.
Method 1: Use a Semicolon
One of the most common remedies you’ll find on the SAT
is a semicolon. A semicolon (;) signals that both sides of the sentence
are grammatically separate but closely related to one another.
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I
walked into the pet store and asked the clerk if she had any talking
parrots; this made her roll her eyes. |
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Method 2: Add a Conjunction
Another method for correcting run-on sentences
is adding conjunctions. Suppose you see this run-on sentence:
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In
her incredible eagerness to cheer her team to victory, Amy the cheerleader
has lost her voice, therefore her performance at the games is a
silent one. |
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If you add the conjunction and:
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In
her incredible eagerness to cheer her team to victory, Amy the cheerleader
has lost her voice and therefore her performance at the games is
a silent one. |
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The run-on disappears.
Method 3: Make the Clauses Relate Clearly
Sometimes sentences contain strange relationships among
clauses that can obscure the meaning of the sentence. (A clause is
just a bunch of words with a subject and a predicate). Here’s an
example:
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The
student council attempted to lure people to the dance with free
food, most people attended the field hockey game. |
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This sentence suggests that despite the student council’s
efforts, people didn’t go to the dance because they went to the
field hockey game. You can correct this run-on sentence by adding
a word that makes this relationship clear:
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Although
the student council attempted to lure people to the dance with free
food, most people attended the field hockey game. |
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Okay, time for a real example:
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The
police reprimanded everyone at the graduation party,
they didn’t seem very sympathetic to the fact that it was our senior
year. |
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at the graduation party, they didn’t seem very sympathetic
to the fact that it was our senior year |
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at the graduation party, seemingly the fact that it was
our senior year did not make them sympathetic |
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at the graduation party without being sympathetic to the
fact that it was our senior year |
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at the graduation party they didn’t, despite the fact that
it was our senior year, seem very sympathetic |
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at the graduation party; they didn’t seem very sympathetic
to the fact that it was our senior year |
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A classic run-on. The two parts could easily stand alone:
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The
police reprimanded everyone at the graduation party. They didn’t
seem very sympathetic to the fact that it was our senior year. |
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Remember, the SAT usually fixes run-ons by exchanging
the comma for a semicolon. In this case, E, which uses
the semicolon method, is the correct answer.
Notice that you could have corrected the question above
by turning the second half into a subordinate clause:
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Since
they reprimanded everyone at the graduation party, the police didn’t
seem very sympathetic to the fact that it was our senior year. |
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Alternatively, you could have inserted the word and between
the two clauses:
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The
police reprimanded everyone at the party, and they didn’t seem very
sympathetic to the fact that it was our senior year. |
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The majority of Improving Sentence questions dealing with
run-ons will require you to use one of the three methods we’ve discussed
to fix the sentence.
3. Misplaced Modifiers
A modifying phrase is a phrase that explains or describes
a word. In standard written English, modifiers usually appear right
next to the word they explain or describe. When modifiers are placed
far away from the word they describe, the sentence becomes confusing
because it’s often unclear which word the modifying phrase is referring
to, as in the following sentence:
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Eating
six cheeseburgers, nausea overwhelmed Jane. |
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This sentence is problematic. We can logically infer that
Jane was doing the eating, but because the modifying phrase (Eating
six cheeseburgers) is so far from the word it’s
intended to modify (Jane), figuring out the meaning
of the sentence takes a lot of work. It could very well seem as
if “nausea” rather than “Jane” is being described. Therefore, the
meaning of the sentence could be that “nausea” ate six cheeseburger fries.
The sentence as-is does not convey the meaning the writer intended.
When you see a modifier followed by a comma,
make sure the word that the modifier describes comes right after
the comma. A corrected version of this sentence could read:
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After
eating six cheeseburgers, Jane was overwhelmed with nausea. |
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The phrase eating six cheeseburgers describes
what Jane is doing, so Jane’s name should come right after the phrase.
Another way to correct the sentence:
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Nausea
overwhelmed Jane after she ate six cheeseburgers. |
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Now take a look at this sample question:
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Having
a bargain price, Marcel snatched up the designer jeans right
away. |
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Having a bargain price, Marcel snatched up the designer
jeans. |
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Marcel who has a bargain price, snatched up the designer
jeans. |
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The jeans’ bargain price led to Marcel’s snatching them
up. |
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Due to their bargain price, Marcel snatched up the designer
jeans. |
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Based on their bargain price, the jeans were snatched up
right away by Marcel. |
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The misplaced modifier in this sentence confuses the meaning
of sentence. As it is, it sounds like Marcel has a bargain price,
but he certainly isn’t for sale. That means you can cut A right
away, since it just preserves the underlined portion of the sentence.
Cut B since it also identifies Marcel as the object
with the bargain price. C uses the possessive awkwardly
and uses them incorrectly to refer to the bargain
price. E looks better, but the phrase the jeans
were snatched up uses the passive voice.
D is the correct answer. In D,
the phrase bargain price modifies designer
jeans rather than Marcel. The correct
answer solves another problem with the original sentence, which
is the phrase having a bargain price.Having does
not clearly express the relationship between the jeans and Marcel’s
purchase. In the correct answer, the phrase due to suggests
that Marcel bought the designer jeans because they had a bargain
price.
4. Parallelism
We covered parallelism in the Identifying Sentence
Errors chapter, but we give it another brief review, since it’s
also likely to show up in Improving Sentences questions.
In every sentence, all of the different components must
start, continue, and end in the same, or parallel, way. It’s especially
common to find errors of parallelism in sentences that list actions
or items. In the example below, the pool rules are not presented
in the same format, which means there is a parallelism error.
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In
the pool area, there is no spitting, no running, and don’t toss
your half-eaten candy bars in the water. |
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The first two forbidden pool activities end in –ing (-ing words
are called gerunds), and because of that, the third forbidden thing
must also end in –ing. If you start with gerunds,
you must continue with gerunds all the way through a list.
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In
the pool area, there is no spitting, no running, and no tossing
your half-eaten candy bars in the water. |
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Here’s a sample Improving Sentences parallelism question:
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The
unlimited shopping spree allowed Rachel to raid the department store and
she could eat everything in the cafe. |
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and she could eat |
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as well as eating |
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so she could eat |
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and a meal |
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and to eat |
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The description of the shopping spree’s powers begins
with an infinitive, to raid. Therefore, on the
other side of that and, we should find another
infinitive. Instead, the original sentence contains the phrase she
could eat, which is not parallel. E, the correct
answer, balances both sides of the equation by substituting to
eat. In its corrected form, the sentence is made nicely
parallel and balanced by the two infinitives:
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The
unlimited shopping spree allowed Rachel to raid the department store
and to eat everything in the cafe. |
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5. Wordiness
Wordiness means using more words than you absolutely
need. It’s the crime you commit when you’ve only gotten four pages
written of a six-page paper and it’s 1 a.m. the night before the
paper’s due. It’s all that meaningless redundant junk you write
in a desperate attempt to fill up space. Here’s an example from
a paper Justin wrote senior year:
“The history of nineteenth-century France is one marked
by great periods of continuity and change.”
Here’s what Justin’s got: Wordy meaninglessness with only
the vague sheen of insight. Wordiness often comes hand in hand with
the passive voice, as in Justin’s weak example (“is one marked by”).
Other times wordiness shows up on its own. Here’s an example:
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Pierre
observed the diners and motels of middle America, and these
are sights that are depicted in his trendy paintings. |
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these are sights that are depicted |
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the depiction of these sights is |
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these sights having been depicted |
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his depiction of these sights |
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depicted these sights |
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This sentence is both wordy and passive. The underlined
part could be said in half the space, and you could remove a few
words without changing the meaning of the sentence at all. For example: Pierre
observed the diners and motels of middle America, and these sights
are depicted in his trendy paintings. But even in that
succinct version, the passive voice remains: The underlined phrase
does not make it clear that Pierre depicted the sights. The phrase sights
that are depicted makes it sound like a disembodied hand
put paint on canvas.
If you encountered this question on the test, you could
immediately eliminate A if you realized there was a
problem to begin with. Both B and C repeat
the original mistakes. They are wordy and they avoid identifying
Pierre as the performer of the action. Answer choice D looks
much better; it’s short and there are no red-flag phrases or words,
such as having been or is, that
suggest the passive voice. Suppose you suspect that D is
the right answer; if you plug it back into the sentence, as you should
always do, you get, Pierre observed the diners and motels
of middle America, and his depiction of these sights in his trendy
paintings. This newly created sentence is actually a fragment,
and therefore grammatically unacceptable.
So you come to E: brief, clear, to the point,
and entirely devoid of the passive voice. Does it check out? Pierre
observed the diners and motels of middle America, and depicted these
sights in his trendy paintings. Yes. E avoids
wordiness, names Pierre as the performer of the action, and is a
grammatically correct sentence.
The Little Three
In addition to the Big Five, you’ll likely see a question
once in a while that deals with one of these three concepts:
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Conjunctions
- Fragments
- Coordination
and subordination
We call these the Little Three, and below we explain them
all.
1. Conjunctions
Conjunctions are connecting words such as and, but, that,
and or. They help link two parts of a sentence
together. Suppose you have two sentences:
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Abigail
jumped off her horse. She then dove into a pool of deep water. |
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A conjunction such as and enables you
to connect the two halves of the sentence:
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Abigail
jumped off her horse and into a pool of deep water. |
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Improving Sentences questions test you on conjunctions
by including sentences in which the conjunction makes the sentence
illogical or clunky.
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Nick
wrote a novel and it depicts the life of
a somewhat inspiring record store clerk. |
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and it depicts |
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being the depiction of |
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it depicts |
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that depicts |
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and depicting in it |
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The right answer is D. In this sentence,
the conjunction that expresses the function of the
novel more smoothly than the clunky phrase and it does.
2. Fragments
Fragments are almost the opposite of run-on sentences.
Run-on sentences have clauses squashed together and joined incorrectly.
Fragments have no independent clause and therefore are incomplete
sentences.
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The
hunchback vice principal growling at students in the
main office. |
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The hunchback vice principal growling |
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The hunchback vice principal having growled |
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Growling, the hunchback vice principal |
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It is the hunchback vice-principal |
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The hunchback vice principal growls |
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In this sentence, the clause lacks a proper verb for the
subject (the hunchback vice principal). The sentence
would be complete if it read, The hunchback vice principal growling
at terrified students was notorious for his brutal tactics.
Notice though that the answer choices don’t fix the fragment that
way. Instead, the correct answer, E, takes away the
problem of expectation altogether. When you read The hunchback vice
principal growls at terrified students, you don’t expect
the sentence to continue. He growls and that’s the end of the story.
3. Coordination and Subordination
Bad coordination happens in gym class when you trip over
your own feet or crash into someone else on the field. Bad coordination
in a sentence happens when two clauses are joined together with
a word that makes their relationship confusing.
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John
made T-shirts for the swim team, but he designed the
logos himself. |
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but he designed the logos himself |
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however, he designed the logos himself |
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and he designed the logos himself |
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since he designed the logos himself |
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and yet, he designed the logos himself |
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The sentences makes it clear that John creates his own
T-shirts. He also designs logos for the T-shirts. So should the
word but express the relationship between these two
activities? No, because the two activities are closely related.
The word but would make sense only if the sentence
said something like John made T-shirts, but other than that
he sat around playing video games all day. The word but suggests
a contrast, a change in the direction of the sentence. If you get
to the middle of a sentence and it takes an unexpected turn, look
for a coordination error.
In this question, you can eliminate B because
the word however is also a bad choice when joining
these two clauses. It expresses the same kind of contrasting relationship
as does the word but. You can eliminate E for
the same reason. Answer D isn’t quite as bad as B and E,
but John made T-shirts for the swim team, since he designed
the logos himself doesn’t make that much sense. John doesn’t
make T-shirts because he designs the logos, he
makes T-shirts and designs the logos, which is exactly
what C says. Bingo.
We thought it would be helpful to put together a list
of conjunctions and split them up based on whether they suggest
contrast or no contrast. Contrast conjunction words like but require
the meaning of the sentence to change direction. For example, “I
would go to school, but I don’t feel well.” Noncontrast
conjunction words like and keep the sentence flowing
in the same direction. For example, “After school I will practice
piano and eat a snack.”
Here’s a chart to help you learn the most important contrast
and non contrast conjunction words.
| Noncontrast Conjunctions |
Contrast Conjunctions |
| and |
but |
| because |
though |
| since |
although |
| so |
while |
| thus |
rather |
| therefore |
instead |
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unless |
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despite |
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however |
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nevertheless |
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Subordination problems happen when there are two subordinate
clauses and no main clause. You don’t need to know what that jargon
means. Instead, you just need to know subordination problems tend
to occur when sentences contain more than one of the conjunction
words listed above. If you see one clause that starts with although, because, if, since,
or so that, and then another clause that starts
with one of these words, you’ll hear the subordination problem loud
and clear:
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Because
Teddy thought his first date with Maria went well, so
that he called her every day for the next week. |
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so that he called her every day for the next week |
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although he called her every day for the next week |
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because he called her every day for the next week |
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he called her every day for the next week |
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and he called her every day for the next week |
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You don’t need to know that this sentence is an example
of bad subordination. Just notice that the two parts of the sentence
don’t go together. Why don’t they fit together? Because there’s
something strange about the middle of the sentence. You hit the
comma, and then the sentence takes an unexpected turn.
The first part of the sentence sets you up: Since Teddy
thought his first date with Maria went well, you expect something
along the lines of he invited her out again or he
kissed her on her front porch, right? Instead, you get
the phrase so that. That just sounds incorrect
and doesn’t make a lot of sense.
Knowing the sentence contains an error allows you to eliminate A.
In B, the word although gives you
exactly the same sort of problem that plagues the original sentence.
Same with C, because. He thought the
date went well because he called her every day the next week? No.
That doesn’t make sense. In E, the word and doesn’t
go with the although that starts the sentence.
Plug D back into the sentence to make sure it fits: Because
Teddy thought his first date with Maria went well, he called her every
day for the next week. Lookin’ good.
As we emphasized a few times already, relying on your
ear and on what “sounds right” is dangerous on the SAT. The SAT
wants you to trust your ear and go with what you think might sound
right in conversation or casual English. Remember that the SAT is
anything but casual and that Improving Sentences questions test
standard written English, not the same English
you speak with friends or family. That makes learning the rules
and familiarizing yourself with these words all the more important.